A legend appears....<br><br><br><a href=http://www.darklordcentral.com/ target=new>http://www.darklordcentral.com/</a>...
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notallwhowander
Feb 2, 2001 7:09 am
If I missed anyone, I'm sorry. It's a bit late...<br><br>fanatic - I like the interplay between characters. The trick reminds me of Dumbo & his magic feather...
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notallwhowander
Feb 3, 2001 1:31 am
I knew a Greywolfe once (I'm pretty sure he used a final "e"). He wielded a Tulwar and a Trident. He put flight to the Dwellers of the Forbidden City, and went...
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Saebuson
Feb 3, 2001 2:11 am
Awwww Maaaaan!!! Wonderful beginning to a story....torture not to know more though. Only one small comment, and I almost feel bad for even mentioning it, but ...
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marciemousemeam
Feb 3, 2001 2:49 am
There is actually a lot more to this story, just waiting to see what the next subject will be. Then mayhaps I will be able to connect it right. At first, I ...
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greywolf_the_wanderer
greywolf_the...
Feb 3, 2001 3:41 am
it was not I, but I know of him. Most of us all know each other, having run into each other at various faires or conventions, or even online. there is even an ...
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whitehawke2000
Feb 3, 2001 4:34 pm
Thank you DD, and yes you have. If you go to post # 5202 I told Jill the same thing and gave her the post numbers to see the beginnings of this ...
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dirtydwarf
Feb 4, 2001 12:10 am
hmmmm....Vampires huh????maybe.... ;)...
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greywolf_the_wanderer
greywolf_the...
Feb 4, 2001 5:21 am
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gauvaine
Feb 4, 2001 6:49 am
Thank you, Bonnie. I try. I'm still tweaking it here and there and need to work on some of the pages, but i'm laying low for a few days to get away from it....
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gauvaine
Feb 4, 2001 7:00 am
Dearest Caroline,<br> The Gods eventually test us in the fullness of time.<br> There is no wont or reason to their scheming and mad delvings, into their ...
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gauvaine
Feb 4, 2001 7:28 am
Of course, feel welcome to reply. I've been experimenting with 1st person POV lately and this was the result.<br><br>Matt...
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sabrina00_ca
Feb 4, 2001 1:16 pm
The Sorceress looked over at the nobleman sitting accross the table from her. Spread out on the table was six talismans. "But how will I know which one to ...
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b5fanatic
Feb 4, 2001 4:47 pm
Many of you have asked for a history about the "lady and sword" story (My little Demon), and I have been working on it. Here is part 1 of the prologue, please...
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b5fanatic
Feb 4, 2001 4:47 pm
Knowing that her father had intended one of them for the throne, and therefor as her husband, she set about their destruction. She seduced them, slowly and ...
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b5fanatic
Feb 4, 2001 4:52 pm
A stranger came to the princess the same night, convinced her that he was a messenger from Adan, and was to take her to a place where they could meet and speak...
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b5fanatic
Feb 4, 2001 4:53 pm
The beautiful Princess Elseedi watched as her hands began to disappear. She looked to her feet, they were slowly vaporizing into the blue mist, and then, she...
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greywolf_the_wanderer
greywolf_the...
Feb 4, 2001 9:44 pm
First person is certainly a challenge, and of course, the hardest to get published. It always reads like a letter. What you have here looks good though. I wish...
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greywolf_the_wanderer
greywolf_the...
Feb 4, 2001 9:59 pm
Just a few pointers if I may. In your opening...<br><br><br><br> 'The Sorceress looked over at the nobleman sitting accross the table from her.'<br><br>Spruce...
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greywolf_the_wanderer
greywolf_the...
Feb 4, 2001 10:05 pm
You are using way to many "had"s. In most cases, it isn't needed. Your punctuation needs work, add some commas, example..after people in line 2. I think I...
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b5fanatic
Feb 4, 2001 10:08 pm
This was very poetic and it really did sound like a letter. I think with a little more work the focus would be clearer...<br><br>With that: I just have one ...
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catkey2001
Feb 5, 2001 12:52 am
"... has anyone considered collecting the expanded versions of these and trying to get them published?"<br><br>I like that idea!! I think we should try...
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catkey2001
Feb 5, 2001 1:09 am
Wow. IMO I liked the first person POV and how everything was described. Very good.<br><br>Mine's on its way but I'm having trouble finding time to write it. ...
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catkey2001
Feb 5, 2001 1:14 am
Very cool. It's kind of ironic how people can get when they're greedy but in the end they all pay. Good job. You are very good at describing what's going on. I...
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catkey2001
Feb 5, 2001 1:19 am
I would like to read "the lady and the sword" now. Your prologue was very intruiging....
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gauvaine
Feb 5, 2001 1:40 am
Sabrina, that was kind of cold-hearted. "Choose, but choose wisely." Just like in the Last Crusade. A nice short-short. You need to work on the dialogue a ...
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gauvaine
Feb 5, 2001 2:21 am
Greywolf, no, 1st person book length would be way too hard, though Laurel K. Hamilton has no trouble with it. I much more prefer 3rd person omniscient. It's...
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b5fanatic
Feb 5, 2001 3:35 am
I like how he could feel the power, and you can kinda get the taste of how he thought he made the right choice before he was consumed. I only wondered why his ...
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sabrina00_ca
Feb 5, 2001 7:34 pm
The sister was left with her brother when her parents died. Destiny kind of had a part in her being at the right time and place. Her brother is/was very ...
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whitehawke2000
Feb 5, 2001 7:45 pm
Some other great 1st person POV authors come to mind too, Anne Rice, Poe, and Dickens to name a few. It is good company to keep if you can write in it. ...
